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Roar
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 2nd November 2013 @ 11:17:46 AM in AEST
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The crown you wear is a court jester hat
I extended an olive branch and in return you spat
Your hatred is a cellophane disguise
I am a friend, not a "fan", so please revise
Take it or leave it, our words always connect
I see in you a lifeless body that I want to resurrect
Being a narcissist is so passé,
Push your inflated ego out of the way
We are both lost in the jungle with no one to help
I came looking for a lion, but you let out a yelp.
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Re: Roar
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd November 2013 @ 02:45:39 PM AEST
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I so love that line "Your hatred is a cellophane disguise". Excellent!
steals it for use at a later date hoping no one will notice
Sounds like this friend has some issues.... 'I am a friend, not a "fan" '
Egos die hard.
Hope this story ends well too.
Thank you my Scorpendous friend for another enjoyable read.
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Re: Roar
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd November 2013 @ 08:14:04 PM AEST
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"Being a narcissist is so passé" we all need to hear this now and again!
"We are both lost in the jungle with no one to help
I came looking for a lion, but you let out a yelp."
I like what you're saying here, although it's tough to take sometimes even from a friend. You connect well here with this poem! Great voice!
Thanks!
Peace! |
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Re: Roar
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by Breezy on
Sunday, 3rd November 2013 @ 06:57:29 PM AEST
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I'm with Tim, the "cellophane disguise" line
really spoke to me. In fact this entire piece is
like a beacon, banging against the side of my
skull. I love the emotion that always swells
inside your poetry.
SO glad that you are back and writing like the
impossibly talented Scorpy I know. ^_^
~ B
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Re: Roar
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 8th November 2013 @ 02:35:38 PM AEST
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Well there is certainly no disguising your talent for this form we call poetry.
Seems to be a guarantee that whatever you write distinguishes itself by the words you use and they way you thread them together.
This is certainly no throwaway poetry, yet again!!
Steve
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Re: Roar
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by Spike on
Saturday, 9th November 2013 @ 05:07:41 PM AEST
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scorpy is working it out, alright.
some intelligent phrasing around a heartfelt plea. Let's hope the message gets through!
Spike |
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Re: Roar
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by jyssvw22 on
Thursday, 28th November 2013 @ 01:25:48 PM AEST
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| It's always interesting to reflect on those who have turned out to be less worthy then we have anticipated. I especially like how your ending of being disappointed and let down seems to not have suprised you. It's almost as if you knew all along , there was no lion , just a weak pathetic excuse instead. |
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Re: Roar
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 14th May 2014 @ 01:17:45 PM AEST
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lol! i think i know this person! i love this
poem, it is precise, moving and to the point,
beautifully penned,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Roar
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 04:19:14 AM AEST
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We are both lost in the jungle with no one to help
I came looking for a lion, but you let out a yelp.
Amen and amen. this is well penned. ever in your scorpy style. I love how you make reference to hatred being just a disguise. we often don't look deep enough into another to see the front they putting up to protect themselves |
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