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Little birds.
Contributed by
mickytwo1984
on
Friday, 16th August 2013 @ 10:39:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
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A bird sat by my window and watched me from a tree
This bird sat by my window and watched me being me
Observed my thoughts, frustration full
I could have had my curtains pulled
But I am I
And I and I
Together stand as one
Forever man and inner man speak out and have our fun
This bird who I saw watching spoke
Through anger sought to see me broke
Though some birds sit and sing their songs
Others simply fly along
This bird no, it sits to watch
It cherishes this branch it's got
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2013-08-16 10:39:40]
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Re: Little birds.
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by MarkMark on
Friday, 16th August 2013 @ 09:48:09 PM AEST
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| Very good play on words .It really flows well but forgive me for saying I think maybe verse 8 could say "Forever men will all speak out and try to have our fun" or something like it . It just seems to flow with the rest . It's a good poem though. |
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Re: Little birds.
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 12th June 2014 @ 11:23:07 PM AEST
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| truly beautiful!! hugs n' love nessa |
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