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Yours forever
Contributed by
Sommer
on
Monday, 27th May 2013 @ 01:27:05 PM in AEST
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You caged me up inside your love
Always thought I had the key
Now the walls are closing in on me
It's getting hard for me to breathe
My days are numbered and I'm tearing at the seems
Try to stop my endless suffering but I have nothing left to bleed
You were the sharp white knife
To help me end my life
But now the flesh it tears
There's nothing there
I'm lost inside this world of "yours forever"
Plotting my escape
I need to run
This poison love is an
Intoxicating cocktail baby
But now the buzz is gone
The chains that bound me to your side
They're rusting off of me tonight
And I need you now to listen
Cause prison love it just ain't right
My days are numbered
And I'm tearing at the seams
Try to stop my endless suffering
But I have nothing left to bleed
You were the sharp white knife
To help me end my life
But now the flesh it tears
There's nothing there
I'm lost inside this world of yours forever
Baby please free me
My wrists are open bleeding
Rubbed raw by all the threats and lies you've sold
And I know you say you love me
But If I don't feel the same
Then what's the point
I beg you please just let me go
( chorus)
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Sommer
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2013-05-27 13:27:05]
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Re: Yours forever
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by JSA on
Monday, 27th May 2013 @ 03:18:06 PM AEST
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| I loved how you used such vivid imagery in your poem, especially describing how love is like a prison. One comment I have is that in the first stanza "Now the walls are closing in on me It's getting hard for me to breath" I think it may sound better if you tried " Now the walls are closing in on me and it's getting harder to breathe" Just a thought.. Great Poem! |
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Re: Yours forever
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by Bittan on
Tuesday, 28th May 2013 @ 05:08:00 AM AEST
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It made me sad reading this, it stimulated my emotions. Good work, I understand moments of melancholy can produce good poetry, I take it you are now free.
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Re: Yours forever
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by katieliz on
Wednesday, 29th May 2013 @ 01:10:27 AM AEST
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| WOW I totally get this , I have been there. good job |
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Re: Yours forever
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by ScribereHabeo on
Wednesday, 29th May 2013 @ 05:33:30 PM AEST
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I really enjoy the way that you embody your feelings
I very much like to read your song lyrics that capture my feelings as well as others
Thanks for the read-Z.D |
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