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Different Tommorow
Contributed by
ScribereHabeo
on
Friday, 10th May 2013 @ 04:27:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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I rest my head as the day goes dark
I wonder if I have left any kind of mark
A reminescence of what I have done
A reminder of a day like this one
But what of tommorow and that oppertunities it brings
And what of the song of sadness that still rings
Will I be left by myself, alone here
What news of tommorow can you hear
Will I solve the problems of today
or will I waste the day away
A new morning is coming when I open my eyes
Who will I be then...... It will be a suprise
But for now I must sleep through the sorrow
And set sail, for a Different Tommorow.........
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2013-05-10 16:27:40]
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Re: Different Tommorow
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by dvtpdw on
Thursday, 16th May 2013 @ 12:14:37 PM AEST
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| Did you read my mind? I so relate to the tale you tell. I like the way you describe the world, yet leave a little room for the good that may come. Like your style. Great write. Thank you for sharing, P |
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Re: Different Tommorow
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by Survivor on
Monday, 15th July 2013 @ 03:46:16 PM AEST
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| Word choice for rhyming is good. A nice rhyming flow. A sad, but inspiring at the end. Sometimes, I take my arm, and make a motion of a wave and say “just take it in stride.” I’m sure you understand the logic in that. I enjoyed this poem because it expresses emotions—the poetry I like best. |
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Re: Different Tommorow
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by Survivor on
Friday, 26th July 2013 @ 05:20:29 PM AEST
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| An extremely great poem! Great rhyming scheme and choice. Most importantly, the way the powerful emotion was express. I can relate to this poem all too well. You might think this this is dumb, but there is logic in this act: when I thick too far ahead, I lift my left arm and do a wave movement while saying “just take it in stride.” |
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