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Daddy
Contributed by
Helenesovig
on
Thursday, 9th May 2013 @ 02:11:57 PM in AEST
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I am a pretender,
There is no other way,
I always surrender,
Cause I don´t know what to say,
This love seems so fake,
Their anger makes me shake,
I cry inside,
Outside,
I die today,
Tonight,
Daddy I´m hurting!
Okay,
Daddy help me!
What way?
Say that you love me,
Say that you care,
Try to protect me,
Show me you´re there.
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Helenesovig
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2013-05-09 14:11:57]
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Re: Daddy
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 21st May 2013 @ 09:45:18 AM AEST
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| I like the conversationalization of this poem. Its simple but it conveys a great trust with your parents in this case your dad. |
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Re: Daddy
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 21st May 2013 @ 09:45:24 AM AEST
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| I like the conversationalization of this poem. Its simple but it conveys a great trust with your parents in this case your dad. |
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Re: Daddy
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by stevenfloyd on
Monday, 27th May 2013 @ 06:34:13 PM AEST
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| I am kind of lost for words on this one. But i can say that i am glad you have your Dad, and the trust that you have in him. You express your self very clear and well. |
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Re: Daddy
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by JohnnyFallen on
Monday, 21st October 2013 @ 02:19:13 AM AEST
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Conversations going on I see?
I haven't seen that in a poem before but it did confuse me. Either way, it seems like you're telling your father or someone else's father to be there. Anyway, that's what the poem says to me but I'm sure you meant to leave a different impact.
Good poem overall though, keep writing! :) |
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