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We all fall down
Contributed by
shelby
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Tuesday, 26th February 2013 @ 01:27:50 AM in AEST
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Ring around the rosey
round and round we go.
A cycle of dysfunction
a dark forboding hole.
Ring around the rosey
round and round we go.
Where we all end up
no one may ever know.
Ring around the rosey
round and round we go
not a childhood game
a disgusting messed up show.
Bent and broken
never on the mend
bits and pieces scattered
shattered hearts floating in the wind.
Ring around the rosey
round and round we go
dust to dust and ashes
one more down for the show.
Ring around the rosey
round and round we go
we all fall down and there we are
no fixing anything now.
We all fell down....
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Re: We all fall down
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by Sagefairy on
Tuesday, 26th February 2013 @ 01:33:24 AM AEST
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| yup. sure do. Although so far, I keep getting back up. How about you? That first verse sure is catchy. You hear the word "dysfunctional" a lot, but "cycle of... disfunction" takes on a life of its own. Nice work! |
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Re: We all fall down
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by colinb on
Tuesday, 26th February 2013 @ 02:10:31 AM AEST
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| the ups & downs of life i love this poem |
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Re: We all fall down
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th February 2013 @ 05:39:59 PM AEST
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I keep getting up too. My very own "cycle of dysfunction" never seems to end. So never ask me for advice. :p
Nicely down, Michelle.
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Re: We all fall down
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by desciple on
Wednesday, 27th February 2013 @ 01:34:47 PM AEST
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| great write, we are all susceptible to failure, but whether we get up...that is were true character is shown. |
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Re: We all fall down
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by Spike on
Thursday, 28th February 2013 @ 04:40:40 AM AEST
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...and I thought I wrote dark poetry about my family!
uncompomisiing and honest - I like it.
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Re: We all fall down
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by Archie on
Thursday, 9th May 2013 @ 11:22:29 AM AEST
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| i like the mening of this. The words keep me thinking and the rhymescheme is very close to perfect. |
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