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My love
Contributed by
lonely09
on
Sunday, 17th February 2013 @ 04:13:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Call me stupid, crazy if you want
because the person that I love
is someone I can never have
forbidden, that's how I'll describe it
When you're lonely at night
and have no one to talk to
you know I'm always here
ready to listen to you
I'm a fool for love
cause I never learn from it
my heartbreaks are no lesson
it just gives me more motivation
You're my teacher
and I'm your student
yet you treat me so different
and I always wonder why.
Copyright ©
lonely09
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2013-02-17 04:13:55]
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Re: My love
(User Rating: 1 )
by thehotshotpoet on
Sunday, 17th February 2013 @ 09:08:11 AM AEST
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very good first try
thanks for sharing
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Re: My love
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by Waynster on
Sunday, 17th February 2013 @ 09:02:06 PM AEST
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Like the Hotshotpoet said, very god first try. I will offer some advice that might help you. If you choose to do quatrain rhyming style poetry, you should focus a bit more on the rhyming words. Quatrain style, which is stanzas or paragraphs of four lines with lines two and four, last words rhyming. The grammar is not important in poetry so much, as it is the words that make a poem what it is. In many cases, when using grammar in poetry, it just won't sound right. I am willing to bet that you are a good writer, as it seems so. Keep up the good work!
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