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perfect mind
Contributed by
apartment213
on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 03:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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vacant room full of mind
taking in the dirty clothes
screams from the back room
echoing starving chills over and over again
her breath hot and dry
tears kill the mascera and dreams
he kills us he kills us
his precision no control
balloons float up to heaven
taking no rain
she comes back down to earth
sees her man choked up again
she wants that gun she wants it loaded
loathing and preperation shaky little thing
she remembers now....
"my daddy did this to me"
she swallows this life and paints the wall
a decorative .44 calibur of love
poor woman poor mother
arogant man he did this to her
sunday now the funeral her new home
all gathered there, mommy painted in white
a tortured smirk breaking her skin
sure dad cries
and tomorrow he'll bask in his success
a murder with no prints
tell me not how can i love this son of a *****?
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Re: perfect mind
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by SomethingClever on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 04:03:07 PM AEST
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| Kenny, this was an awesome write... I don't know why people get put in those situations... I guess people just have to "pray". |
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Re: perfect mind
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by Ash on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 05:03:45 PM AEST
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| This is very powerful, and very deep. Also,s adly, very true. I love it. Looking forward to the next write. |
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Re: perfect mind
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by Ash on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 05:04:16 PM AEST
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| This is very powerful, and very deep. Sadly,it's also very true. I love it. Looking forward to the next write. |
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Re: perfect mind
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by AngryPrincess on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 05:15:14 PM AEST
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wow, kenny, this one is by FAR your best write....i absolutely love it, you did so well...i love you
Lindsey
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Re: perfect mind
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by TypenLutschen on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 06:19:32 PM AEST
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| This is really expressive. There's nothing much I can say about it that hasn't already been said except that it's pretty full. |
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Re: perfect mind
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 10:26:30 PM AEST
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| Excellent write ... deep, dark .. and I like it ... Jan |
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