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fast. . .
Contributed by
elle
on
Monday, 17th December 2012 @ 09:46:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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nothingness
clings to my insides
my ribs forming a cage
& I call out to you
from the hollow center
of a mouth long, uncraved
with words less than tender
& a heart like a stone
I fast for your lost love. . .
I wait all alone
Copyright ©
elle
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2012-12-17 21:46:19]
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Re: fast. . .
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by Banjosandwitch on
Tuesday, 18th December 2012 @ 06:51:25 AM AEST
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| Love it but needs caps DIFFICULT TO READ WITHOUT soz |
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Re: fast. . .
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by spud on
Tuesday, 18th December 2012 @ 10:01:49 AM AEST
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Hi Elle,
Love, like everything else, has a down side ....
loneliness, yearning, pain, with a hint of
unrequitedness - all here in this short but
sweet gem of a poem.
Tommy
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Re: fast. . .
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th December 2012 @ 01:34:16 AM AEST
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Wow, those last four words input sadness into me ol' heart.
Phew...
So it was hard for me to tell if you're glad or sad that you're done with this part of your life as the rest of it seemed so strong with the finality of a ******** relationship.
Thank you ever consistent one of great poetry! |
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Re: fast. . .
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 19th December 2012 @ 05:13:45 AM AEST
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A tender and well written verse.
Be ok?? Iv said this a few times tonight while reading here, you arent alone, believe that.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: fast. . .
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by unknown_utopia on
Wednesday, 19th December 2012 @ 08:42:01 AM AEST
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| Interesting flow...... |
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Re: fast. . .
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by Spike on
Sunday, 23rd December 2012 @ 08:05:21 PM AEST
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Hi elle,
smooth and well-rounded. I don't understand that other comment about caps, but that aside...
a fast is okay for a short time, to appreciate the sustenance when it does arrive, but it doesn't help to dwell too long on lost loves, except to yield their poetic harvest, of course (no good poetry without pain).
it's Christmas, girl - shake it!
S. |
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Re: fast. . .
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by ming on
Tuesday, 26th February 2013 @ 12:15:02 AM AEST
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| A cage of words. Great words. Great poetry. Love. ming |
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Re: fast. . .
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 28th April 2014 @ 10:30:55 PM AEST
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| exquisite, hugs n' love nessa |
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