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The Unwelcome Visitors
Contributed by
lillyjane
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Thursday, 4th October 2012 @ 08:42:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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The unwelcome guest
A creak on the stair a noise in the Eaves
A tapping sound and rustling of leaves
Scratching noises a pungent smell
A slimy rat a visitor from hell
Sleepless nights fear and stress
Getting worse as the rats infest
Then you find the awful source
Nature starts to take its course
Your sickened by the smell and flies
Yet sorry for the rat that dies
Your house regained fresh and new
Still shaking from what you went through
Never will they enter again
There locked back down in the drain
Copyright ©
lillyjane
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2012-10-04 08:42:18]
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Re: The Unwelcome Visitors
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by northernlights on
Thursday, 4th October 2012 @ 09:02:11 AM AEST
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| I went through the same experience when I moved into a new flat with my 18 month old baby.They were shinning up and down the drain pipes, thankfully my cat was a great,'ratter.' Great poem and a trip down memory lane for me, such a relief when the problem is dealt with. |
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Re: The Unwelcome Visitors
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by Stalkee on
Thursday, 4th October 2012 @ 10:10:31 PM AEST
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You painted a vivid picture of the incident and I felt like I was going through this experience with you which is what makes this such a great reading experience.
Nice work, keep penning! |
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Re: The Unwelcome Visitors
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by emystar on
Friday, 5th October 2012 @ 01:34:19 AM AEST
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Spooky but great writing.
Blessings,
emy
I know you are happy that it's over. |
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Re: The Unwelcome Visitors
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by thehotshotpoet on
Saturday, 6th October 2012 @ 05:55:56 AM AEST
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thanks for sharing
the hot shot poet |
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Re: The Unwelcome Visitors
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 22nd October 2012 @ 05:00:34 PM AEST
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| Thank you for your comments they have gone now it was a really bad time and I feel sorry for anyone who has this happen, I still jump at every little noise will take time to get over xx |
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