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Subzero Erotic
Contributed by
plasticherry
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Wednesday, 5th September 2012 @ 11:03:31 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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The glow of your eyes
Is like light reflected on the diamond shards
Like two laser beams
Illuminating the dark in my heart
Lotus bloomed out of your veins
Slowely swaying it's scarlet vines
The flow of water in your heart
Dropped all my feelings in the dark
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plasticherry
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2012-09-05 11:03:31]
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Re: Subzero Erotic
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by spud on
Wednesday, 5th September 2012 @ 02:05:31 PM AEST
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Fingertip hot!
Sub-zero? More sizzling than a heat-wave.
Nice one!
Tommy
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Re: Subzero Erotic
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th September 2012 @ 02:28:50 PM AEST
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The first stanza sounds like the person is totally in love and enamored but the second stanza sorta scared me....
Again, your imagery is so great I could see this:
Lotus bloomed out of your veins
Slowely swaying it's scarlet vines
I mean a lotus coming from someone's veins???!!! lol. Yikes, I'd probably run. :p
And water for blood? Is it an alien from planet Sloj?
Okay, so to make myself perfectly clear, I mean no disrespect. That's just what I got out of it and I loved it and enjoyed it a lot. Why else would there be a lengthy comment?
Thank you for an enjoyable read.
Tim |
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Re: Subzero Erotic
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by Ellewood on
Friday, 7th September 2012 @ 08:00:00 PM AEST
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| Very nicely written!! |
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