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Subway
Contributed by
Ellie1284
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Tuesday, 26th June 2012 @ 04:15:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The water is rising in the subway car
No one else seems to notice
The people go about their business
The water is rising to their bellies
No one sees the water rising higher and higher
It's up to my neck, I'm panicking inside
It's covering my nose
I can't breath, it's rising to my eyes, about to distort my view
The subway car stops
The doors open
The water pours out into the station
I, like the others, walk to the stairs that bring you to the light
The light of darkness that is this world.
Copyright ©
Ellie1284
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2012-06-26 16:15:42]
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Re: Subway
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by richard2 on
Tuesday, 26th June 2012 @ 06:43:27 PM AEST
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This is a excellent poem. It causes one to think on things, think deeply. Again, good job.
Take care
Richard |
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Re: Subway
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by Me1234 on
Tuesday, 26th June 2012 @ 06:45:02 PM AEST
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| Very metaphorical and thought provoking, nicely done |
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Re: Subway
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by Ensis718 on
Tuesday, 26th June 2012 @ 09:27:13 PM AEST
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| It made me scared for a minute, 'cause I really thought I was going to choke...Lol. Anyway, good job! |
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