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A Man With A Broken Heart
Contributed by
AznDemon300
on
Saturday, 23rd June 2012 @ 10:47:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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As you walk down the street, a girl catches your eye.
A girl so light and thin she could float like a butterfly.
Your eyes roll down from her eyes to her thigh.
Your tears build up as if your about to cry.
She looks at you and sees a man with a tie.
A sparkling connection you just can't deny.
She walks towards you with an intimidating stare.
A stare so strong it's stronger than the sun glare.
She pulls up in front of you and grabs you by the tie.
Slowly drawing you closer as if she wants you to standby.
Her soft skin and sweet perfume just blows you away.
All you wished for was for her to just stay.
Suddenly, she turns the tables on you.
She doesn't have a reason, only if you knew.
A slap runs right across your square face.
A slap leaving you clueless, leaving you with a dogface.
She turns right around and starts to walk away.
Walking with her head high as if she was on Broadway.
Your eyes stare into the distance, looking right at your sweetheart.
The sweetheart that left you with a shattered broken heart.
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2012-06-23 22:47:39]
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Re: A Man With A Broken Heart
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by snc54 on
Monday, 25th June 2012 @ 12:03:39 AM AEST
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| good write. try to use different rhyme schemes. not that this one is bad, but to use more of a less used scheme. and maybe not even use a rhyme scheme at all. always write what comes to heart. poetry shouldnt be about rhyming |
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Re: A Man With A Broken Heart
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by Ensis718 on
Tuesday, 26th June 2012 @ 09:53:38 PM AEST
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| Hm..put some spaces between some lines to create stanzas. It's the same way as writing a new paragraph in a story. Well done, by the way! |
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