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Candlelight
Contributed by
nikki080794
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Tuesday, 19th June 2012 @ 04:30:57 PM in AEST
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When all the lights go out,
And the moon is all we have,
We stay safe and secure,
Under the protection of our candlelight.
The light promises warmth and easily gives,
It is what we need, ignoring the present.
It reveals our dark surroundings,
While we remain by our candlelight.
The wax burns and the moon remains,
The flame distorts the silver light and creates our own.
We are breaking away from the earth,
We rebel with our precious candlelight.
Silver changes to daylight as the moon shies away,
The strength from the candle diminishes.
Its exuberance is taken by the sun’s growth,
As it outmatches our candlelight.
The earth notices our presence,
And we notice its existence.
It’s not the same place it was moments ago,
When we were guarded by our candlelight.
By Nikki
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nikki080794
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2012-06-19 16:30:57]
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Re: Candlelight
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by richard2 on
Tuesday, 19th June 2012 @ 09:27:54 PM AEST
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I'd say it's more than OK, it's very good .The atmosphere is genuine and touching which is what we can hope for in our metaphors and scribblings.
For a first try it really is very appealing.
write more
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Re: Candlelight
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by Raggie on
Wednesday, 20th June 2012 @ 03:56:38 AM AEST
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| I agree with Richard. You have done well. Your poem has texture. It's good. Please write more and more:) |
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Re: Candlelight
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by Sasha on
Monday, 25th June 2012 @ 10:54:22 PM AEST
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| very well written, Nikki.. |
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