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Locked Inside
Contributed by
Elia
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Friday, 1st June 2012 @ 03:43:15 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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There are so many things I want to express, my perfectionist inside will not allow.
It must be flawlessly worded and phrased, But I simply do not know how.
Lock inside, my true feelings hidden, missing words are to fault,
They are concealed deep in my mind, which hold them like a vault.
Fear of miscommunication or misunderstanding keeps me subdued,
I desire to express myself, but my thoughts isolate and seclude
Someday to be intrepid instead of timid, I must admit,
This I hope will eradicate my self-judgment, and be my permit.
To allow myself to be untied and finally be set free,
I am saddened to say that my only obstacle in this journey is me.
Copyright ©
Elia
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2012-06-01 03:43:15]
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Re: Locked Inside
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by northernlights on
Friday, 1st June 2012 @ 05:33:39 AM AEST
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| More often than not it is ourselves that stand in the way of us living life and you have eloquently expressed this,thankfully writing is a great medium to unlock all that is inside and the braver you are to bleeding your heart onto the page then there is the difference between good and amazing writing, |
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Re: Locked Inside
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by monday_girl on
Tuesday, 5th June 2012 @ 12:39:06 AM AEST
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Well, you may have the ability to rhyme, but i cant say you have a proper understanding how to write poetry. This may sound a little harsh, but believe me, an artist has to face criticism in order to improve their work.
As for now, this seem to be taken from a diary. Poetry, i mean, good poetry shouldnt be this obvious. You have to find words - keys to hide the meaning. Good luck :) |
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Re: Locked Inside
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th June 2012 @ 02:19:51 AM AEST
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What Anna said (northernlights). This takes courage.
Keep up the good work
I'll PM you the rest.
Take care,
Tim |
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