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Wonderland
Contributed by
Awakening_Sunshine
on
Tuesday, 22nd May 2012 @ 10:21:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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All around I see,
People sniffing flowers.
In the distance,
I see many dark towers.
As I walk closer,
It gets very small.
I walk into this room,
And find a mysterious doll.
Around the room,
I see pointy vines.
There is this paper,
Filled with words on it's lines.
There are dungeons and dragons,
Candy trees and more.
I never want to leave this land,
Back into the swirly colored door.
Copyright ©
Awakening_Sunshine
... [
2012-05-22 22:21:07]
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Re: Wonderland
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by dojo1970 on
Wednesday, 23rd May 2012 @ 08:12:08 AM AEST
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| describes Alice in wonderland pretty good. nice rhyming too. Good job. |
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Re: Wonderland
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by PreciousKitten on
Thursday, 24th May 2012 @ 10:38:24 AM AEST
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| i like the poem, it was cool yet awesome. keep writing. |
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Re: Wonderland
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by richard2 on
Thursday, 24th May 2012 @ 05:28:18 PM AEST
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I too like the rhymes, they do not seem forced which
is excellent. Lewis Carroll was one of the first poets
I ever encountered as a child and this portrays some of Alice's adventures quite well. |
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Re: Wonderland
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by alicewhite on
Monday, 28th May 2012 @ 08:40:21 PM AEST
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| Hi, really nice and whymsical, i too find alice in wonderland deeply significant almost archetypal a common thread with much deeper meaning to us as a species or you could say portraying muchness, at a subconscious level it resonates more meaning than the outer layer first indicates, I also like that your user name refers to awakening as i personally think someone who has evolved understands the link between alice in wonderland and higher consciousness at a far deeper level than most, even quantum physics uses alice in wonderland to explain atoms ie all matter at the sub atomic level , basically falling down the rabbit hole into a strange surreal world really sums it up, again a really great poem |
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