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Contributed by
EveAlone
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Sunday, 13th May 2012 @ 08:35:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I lack the knowledge
The creative pursuit
I lack the skill
My brain is their boots
My mind drains
I suffer
My body takes the toll
This is not my face
I look in the mirror
Broken concepts
Tunnels full of water
My chest is sinking
Heavy
Give me a hat
My eyes are weak
101 things to be complete
They all watched me fall
After I pushed
I cannot do this
Bring me my axe
A pile of logs
A broken little girl
Will I ever be whole?
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Re: Full
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by richard2 on
Sunday, 13th May 2012 @ 10:21:39 PM AEST
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Not bad
some good metaphors
condense a litle next time
and you get there
remember poetry is addictive'
once the bug gets you, you'll
always write
I've been bitten for fifty years
take care
richard |
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Re: Full
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by poewhit on
Monday, 14th May 2012 @ 01:59:22 AM AEST
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| Poetry, comes in all shapes, forms and sizes. It will reach someone somewhere. Keep Truckin |
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Re: Full
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 15th May 2012 @ 02:49:18 AM AEST
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| Down trodden lack of self esteem to the extent you don't recognise yourself any more.Going under and at the same time taking responsibility for what is happening to you......bring me my axe...owning the process. strong summary a broken little girl.The darkness lies in the reality of this write and I can feel the pain and the anguish, |
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Re: Full
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by dojo1970 on
Saturday, 19th May 2012 @ 08:33:25 AM AEST
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| expression is one of the many poetry forms. Anything you feel in written form is a poem. It may or may not touch everyone, but some people will understand how you are feeling or get where you are coming from because they have similar experiences. I encourage you to keep writing. Good luck. |
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