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way back when
Contributed by
thehotshotpoet
on
Saturday, 12th May 2012 @ 07:50:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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sometomes when we think back
to how it use to be
back when we were younger
& so full of energy
noone could slow us down
no matter how hard they tried
they'de say we were not truthfull
if we did'nt look them in the eye
so many lies had been told
just because we could
our stories were always confusing
just because they sounded good
we all knew what we were good at
but what we did'nt know
our parents were usually one step ahead
but it would never ever show
now when I look back
at how bad I'd gotten
I thank my lucky stars
My kids are'nt half that Rotten
well at least I dont believe they are
I know how wrong that I could be
they are at the age that I was
so young so wild & free
the hot shot poet
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Re: way back when
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by poewhit on
Sunday, 13th May 2012 @ 10:21:10 AM AEST
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| Think we all are hot shots in our youths. Just another cycle. |
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Re: way back when
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by poetryislife on
Monday, 14th May 2012 @ 08:25:31 AM AEST
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This poem is not clear. Second, there are some grammatical errors must be fixed. For example: "noone" wrong, it should be written in this way (no one), and another mistake, "it use to be" wrong, it should be written in this way, (it uses to be).
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