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What do I do?
Contributed by
poemkid
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Tuesday, 1st May 2012 @ 08:58:00 PM in AEST
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What do I do?
Should I be with her?
Should I be with you?
Or should I live a life alone?
a king with no queen,
a half empty throne.
You''re my sun you give me light
but she''s the moon and I like it at night
so i sit here torn, chewing at the bit
maybe I should just quit
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Re: What do I do?
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by richard2 on
Tuesday, 1st May 2012 @ 09:49:16 PM AEST
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not bad if it is your first attempt
as far as the question:
carrying the metaphor further -
the moon only shines by means of the reflected sun.
take care
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Re: What do I do?
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 1st May 2012 @ 11:23:15 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
Keep writing.
Good work.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: What do I do?
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by northernlights on
Sunday, 6th May 2012 @ 01:45:14 PM AEST
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| A king with no queen a half empty throne, keep writing with this depth of expression and you will succeed. |
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