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moderation
Contributed by
thehotshotpoet
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Sunday, 8th April 2012 @ 09:33:41 AM in AEST
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in total moderation
as words race threw my head
they always seem to find a way
to bring me from my bed
I don't mean while I'm sleeping
I mean before daylight
I pour a cup of coffee
& then sit down to write
words in moderation
of everything I feel
my words are never almost right
there excactly what is real
the words they seem to flow
like the breaking of a dam
they may say nothing to someone else
but there excactly who I am
as far as my spelling
this early in the day
I know there's some not written right
but what more can I say
if I were perfect i would be god
perfect for the world to see
he's the only perfect thing in this world
so it surely can't be me
the hot shot poet
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Re: moderation
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by Byrdie on
Sunday, 8th April 2012 @ 01:58:20 PM AEST
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hotshotpoet.........interesting nick name.........
Line 2........through
line 12.....they're
line 16.....that's
always capitalize a person's name...........
especially God.............
I suggest punctuation..........then you will
not make the above errors...
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Re: moderation
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by Voice of the Silent on
Sunday, 8th April 2012 @ 03:01:08 PM AEST
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No one is perfect I doubt even god would be. IT is my belief that perfect or not a person is as they are with or without fault. and they should do things their way. I don't think proper english should be a concern with poetry it should be written as you see fit.
Very interesting read
hope to read more soon
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