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AM I ALONE?
Contributed by
hray42
on
Tuesday, 27th March 2012 @ 08:11:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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i'm lying in bed alone
but i'm not by myself
love has made it's exit
and now it's on too high a shelf
i'm trying to sleep next to a stranger
someone i used to know very well
all that is left is a body
it's you in your empty shell
i wish i could blame you for this
but i played my little part
God! what happened to us!
what happened to our wonderful start?
i'm not alone am i?
please tell me you're still in there
are you awake my dear?
please hold me and say that you care...
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hray42
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2012-03-27 20:11:44]
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Re: AM I ALONE?
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by alicewhite on
Tuesday, 27th March 2012 @ 08:27:09 PM AEST
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| love this , it makes so much sense -- if you are in a long time relationship-- also really weird as i have just a moment ago sent you a private message about my nephews song that i have posted on here earlier called Am i in this alone- what a coincidence -=-=or not? |
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Re: AM I ALONE?
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by northernlights on
Wednesday, 28th March 2012 @ 05:27:08 AM AEST
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| Ouch! The pain of seeing physical presence without feeling connection or love, So many questions and no answers, frustration and sadness, looking for the past as something to cling onto and yet seeing the reality as life doesnt wait it moves on.Heartfelt .and moving write |
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Re: AM I ALONE?
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by thehotshotpoet on
Wednesday, 28th March 2012 @ 06:58:48 AM AEST
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| sometimes some of us can read between the lines,i truly hope you can figure it out because you seem like it is confusing you very much |
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Re: AM I ALONE?
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by Waynster on
Wednesday, 28th March 2012 @ 03:44:21 PM AEST
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Hello,
Generally, if these are your thoughts, then it is something real for you! I am sorry your feeling this way, I truly know how you feel. You just wrote exactly how i feel and what i am going through! I think your poem is awesome, but i think you could change the style in how it's written, which will make it easier to read and make it sound more beautiful.
You do have a talent, keep it up!
Waynster |
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