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There comes God
Contributed by
ravi
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Monday, 5th May 2003 @ 10:35:00 PM in AEST
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I saw a barren desert of lost hopes,untold,
where the wind cries and moon shines cold,
the stars smile only to jeer and mock,
at a man made God made of gravel and rock,
where death walks it's chilly steps day after day,
and devil rules with terror all the way,
where people are all defeated and damned,
and the paths are closed and doors are slammed.
A stranger comes by an unseen way,
with silent steps on a golden day,
the face gentle; his hands wielding a golden rod,
the winds whispered loud ; there comes God.
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2003-05-05 22:35:00]
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Re: There comes God
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 5th May 2003 @ 10:54:20 PM AEST
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good write
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Re: There comes God
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by Apartment213 on
Monday, 5th May 2003 @ 11:39:08 PM AEST
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| it painted a picture of this god u speak of...very vivid good poem |
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Re: There comes God
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by shelby on
Monday, 5th May 2003 @ 11:56:52 PM AEST
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Well done Ravi, I like it!!
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Re: There comes God
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by exiled on
Tuesday, 6th May 2003 @ 01:59:09 AM AEST
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very good ravi. keep posting.
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Re: There comes God
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by kalika_vidya on
Tuesday, 6th May 2003 @ 05:32:01 AM AEST
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| what is the need for god to descend down on a desert field where no men are seen?.. wrong track.. Kalika |
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Re: There comes God
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by Ravi on
Tuesday, 6th May 2003 @ 08:35:41 AM AEST
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| Kalika ,this is not a actual desert.This is a desert of lost hopes and filled with utter desolation.You feel that you are in such a desert when your hopes are crashed and your mind is filled with disillusion |
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Re: There comes God
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by Ravan on
Tuesday, 6th May 2003 @ 04:19:34 PM AEST
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| Content completely aside I enjoyed the imagery. I thought it was well crafted and had a good flow. |
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