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Disappointed Love
Contributed by
essential
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Tuesday, 27th December 2011 @ 05:41:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The night is cold and dark
And no clouds cover the sky
As I set out for a walk
Just me, myself and I
But my mind is spinning off
To somehow look for company
in thoughts, it finds a girl I loved
Or thought so till she disappointed me
On a bridge crossing the river
Stands an old man with a light
As I stop he gives a shiver
And his warm words befog the night
"Not every plant's a bloom
And not every bloom smells
And wearing a costume
Does not make you someone else"
And he disappears
But his words are left behind
Loudly they ring in my ears
And lie puzzled in my mind
And as I look up into the dark
I understand what he was sayin
That, what I mistook for a star
Is just a common aeroplane
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Re: Disappointed Love
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by richard2 on
Tuesday, 27th December 2011 @ 06:30:24 AM AEST
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"Very good lines, I like it.. There's an old Doc Watson
song that I heard once that specks to the subject -
'there's more pretty girls than one' |
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Re: Disappointed Love
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by BritVent on
Tuesday, 27th December 2011 @ 06:34:02 AM AEST
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| this is beautiful |
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Re: Disappointed Love
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by bunit682 on
Tuesday, 27th December 2011 @ 06:58:02 AM AEST
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| That was pretty awesome. Did you come up with the old mans quote yourself? |
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Re: Disappointed Love
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by illuminate_the_shadows on
Tuesday, 10th January 2012 @ 01:19:33 PM AEST
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| Yess, this is wonderful style. It tells a story, and rhymes without too much of a strain. Good work! |
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