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To the boy left behind:
Contributed by
ChaosFactor
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Thursday, 8th December 2011 @ 11:36:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
dedicatedpoems
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I love you so much; you know it's true,
But it's time for me to sing a happy tune.
I've found my temporary home,
A place to strike out, almost on my own.
Contentment is near, overwhelming the fear
That had been my companion through the years.
Still, something is missing; my happiness is incomplete.
Without you, this home is just a place to rest my weary feet.
Dear love, dear boy, I know you know
The only reason I decided to go
Was so that you could follow me,
And we could escape, happily.
So please, dear one, don't be left behind--
You are the reason behind all my clever rhymes.
I fear for you, but I haven't lost hope,
Though I fear that too may soon go up in smoke.
Hurry, come with me--
Then we can be truly free.
Copyright ©
ChaosFactor
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2011-12-08 23:36:07]
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Re: To the boy left behind:
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by dvtpdw on
Friday, 9th December 2011 @ 10:00:34 AM AEST
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| Nice write, the words flowed smooth, and the emotion stood out. Liked it. |
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Re: To the boy left behind:
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by poeticjestix on
Friday, 9th December 2011 @ 10:39:06 AM AEST
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I got the emotion. Thought the 2nd line rhyme was a little off but other than that , a good job.
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