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Jack Frost
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Friday, 2nd December 2011 @ 02:17:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I watch the world get smaller
the people leave me,
one by one;
this winter is getting longer,
I pray for warmth,
I need the sun.
I watch the world retreating
they turn their backs
they flee, they run,
I plead with them to love me.
I pray for a friend,
...please, just one.
I'm colder by the moment,
I need a shoulder,
someone to cry on
but through my Jack Frost window,
the world is empty,
the people, gone.
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
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2011-12-02 02:17:40]
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Re: Jack Frost
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by dvtpdw on
Friday, 2nd December 2011 @ 11:25:17 AM AEST
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| Your sadness and lonely heart shine thru these lines. You can feel your yearning for love. Nice write - it flowed so well. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by aReasonForBrokenWings on
Sunday, 4th December 2011 @ 12:35:02 PM AEST
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| I loved this. You're really talented and I can really relate to this. |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by Wachumiri on
Sunday, 4th December 2011 @ 09:14:26 PM AEST
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Still, your basic tends to be better than a lot of people's complex. A good poem shows what you want it to, and hides what you want to only imply. You wrote what you needed to say, and you did it well, so well done my friend.
Take care,
David |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 5th December 2011 @ 06:13:58 AM AEST
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| Great write. Warm hugs. |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th December 2011 @ 07:34:27 PM AEST
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I can soooo feel your pain, Phyllis. I wish we weren't half way around the world from each other because I'd give you a big hug!!!!
Still, though, you have always been an amazing poet and here lies no exception.
Love ya'
Timmy |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 12th April 2014 @ 02:43:55 PM AEST
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even in sadness you write so beautifully,
big hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd May 2014 @ 09:28:09 PM AEST
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| And then the sun broke through the clouds, such sadness. Hugs I love you lil sis. |
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Re: Jack Frost
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by Jecks on
Thursday, 28th March 2019 @ 02:34:44 PM AEST
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The first time I read this, I couldn`t comment.
This is incredibly well written and incredibly painful to read. You took your raw emotions and melded them into a beautiful piece with no loss of feeling. |
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