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My Hell
Contributed by
alicia
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Wednesday, 30th November 2011 @ 01:31:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Show me my hell
Show me more pain
I want to see it well
Open and plain
I refuse your game
It will all end
And he must come
Because i'm tired of this trend
Around untrue
I will not lie
My life is dark blue
And I will die
So to the breath that last comes out
My pain will not be over
I have no doubt
Because I might be lower
In the fiery pits of hell
Where because of my mistakes I'll learn
To be awoken at the bell!
Copyright ©
alicia
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2011-11-30 13:31:57]
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Re: My Hell
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by dvtpdw on
Wednesday, 30th November 2011 @ 01:43:14 PM AEST
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| Sad, anguish, yet showed a thread of light. Nice. |
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Re: My Hell
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by Blackheart on
Wednesday, 30th November 2011 @ 05:35:02 PM AEST
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| I love this poem, especially because anger is the easiest thing for me to write about. It really caught my attention and might I say, for me it's violently inspiring. |
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Re: My Hell
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by doug on
Saturday, 3rd December 2011 @ 03:11:14 PM AEST
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| You've got me wondering what the bell is. The bell to what. lol. That's a good thing though. I enjoyed your writing... I can relate. Not all of us are happy go lucky trend following whatever they call themselves now. Do keep writing. The greatess art is always inspired by pain. Truly , Doug |
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Re: My Hell
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by GREAT-WHITE on
Friday, 9th December 2011 @ 02:13:11 PM AEST
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| this is very good |
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