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shrapnel
Contributed by
elle
on
Sunday, 16th October 2011 @ 07:52:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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shrapnel
existed
even when
I could not
feel it
tinkle
to the floor
like raindrops
trapped
in the atmoshere
of our discontent
if you peel back
any piece
of any layer
of what is left
of us
you will find
a wounded
wish
with droplets
of its own
Copyright ©
elle
... [
2011-10-16 19:52:36]
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Re: shrapnel
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 18th October 2011 @ 07:55:37 PM AEST
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Stylish and truthful, with fitting metaphors of what remains from breakups. I usually count my CDs first, then attend to the heart.
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Re: shrapnel
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by ming on
Wednesday, 19th October 2011 @ 09:55:31 AM AEST
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AWESOME! The metaphors take us all to our own pain and thus we share as a community of poets. Well done!
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Re: shrapnel
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th November 2013 @ 02:26:48 PM AEST
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That's sad. :(
On the positive side, you never fail to impress me.
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