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Autumn Shadows.
Contributed by
cashfan1
on
Wednesday, 5th October 2011 @ 08:16:21 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Autumn morning and the sky is drunk
With sunshine.
The cool clear waters of the lake swim
Through an image a thousand years in the making.
And the hedgerows are all a tremble
With the flitting wings of tiny birds,
Their harvest beaks dripping crimson in the green.
And the high tops break cover,
Seduced by the lure of the horizon
Where the vast blue sky splits in two and oozes
The hot lather of the sun.
Below the morning path snakes through the valley
And the hot, parched, dusty sheep cling to the hillside.
A cooing chorus of pigeons ignites the loneliness
And the air is busy distilling the last fruits of summer.
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cashfan1
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2011-10-05 08:16:21]
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Re: Autumn Shadows.
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by Shadowman on
Wednesday, 5th October 2011 @ 03:49:00 PM AEST
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| I get the sense of actually being there while reading this poem. Thank you for that, very well done. |
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Re: Autumn Shadows.
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by ming on
Friday, 7th October 2011 @ 09:20:27 AM AEST
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I think is good, but the words are very common. I think you could do better to and branch out with words that are more awe inspiring. not saying this with malice at all. Love.
ming |
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Re: Autumn Shadows.
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 8th October 2011 @ 02:01:15 PM AEST
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Fantastic imagery on this one.
Even though it is now cold here in the UK as I write this, I can still relive the time by letting myself submerge in the words you have written.
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Re: Autumn Shadows.
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by duff on
Monday, 10th October 2011 @ 09:15:17 PM AEST
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It's been awhile my friend...your imagery is stunning as always and it transports you to that place...the words leap off the page and onto a canvas...beautiful piece of writing
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