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Back in time 2009
Contributed by
pat346
on
Monday, 3rd October 2011 @ 04:10:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I'm used to this by now
the bright red lights fly by in this damp town
and the leaves are falling down
another season without you around
I made a call to spring and asked if you could swing by
but my call was declined
So I drove to summer and waited by the tide
but no blue eyes
You smiled at me, quite frequently
Out of the corner of my eye
You'd whisper like an angel,
that it would all be alright
I sat through winter shivering sweat
and words I hadn't told you yet
I pulled the cold sheets around me
and tried not to forget
I made a call to spring and asked if you could swing by
but my call was declined
So I drove to summer and waited by the tide
but no blue eyes
This is it, I miss you
I have no idea why
The entity, of you and me
will not leave my mind...
I would kill for 2009
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Re: Back in time 2009
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 8th October 2011 @ 01:28:35 PM AEST (User
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I especially loved the emphasis of the lines:
"I made a call to spring and asked if you could swing by
but my call was declined"
in this piece.
Had a nice flow and created a strong scene.
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