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THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
Contributed by
FlintHunter
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Monday, 19th September 2011 @ 12:24:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
Then lift your carpet off the floor, my friend,
And lay me down upon the barren wood,
That I might feel the coldness as I would,
That you might learn beginning is of end.
Then lift your curtain — darkness: don’t defend,
And gather up your candles as you should,
That you might know the light of When was good,
That I might know whence came the questions penned.
The words we wished to rest upon the ground
Have shown themselves as whispers in the wind;
Then where-to run the patterns that we said?
Let evening lay upon us silent sound --
And sneak around our fire — setting snare...
That we might bear to learn our rhymes are dead.
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Flint Hunter 2011
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FlintHunter
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2011-09-19 12:24:51] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Monday, 19th September 2011 @ 01:43:10 PM AEST (User
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Very creative awesome write.
huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
(User Rating: 1 ) by fortunesdancer on
Monday, 19th September 2011 @ 02:40:20 PM AEST (User
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obscure brilliance |
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Re: THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
(User Rating: 1 ) by ammar on
Tuesday, 20th September 2011 @ 09:49:18 AM AEST (User
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I love the imagery of this poem, and the ease with which the words flow is again remarkable.
I always thought that modern poets lacked the ability to write poetry in the various established forms. But here is a fine example of a sonnet; it reminds me of the likes of Elizabeth Browning.
Keep writing
Peace
Ammar
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Re: THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
(User Rating: 1 ) by ammar on
Tuesday, 20th September 2011 @ 09:51:00 AM AEST (User
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I love the imagery of this poem, and the ease with which the words flow is again remarkable.
I always thought that modern poets lacked the ability to write poetry in the various established forms. But here is a fine example of a sonnet; it reminds me of the likes of Elizabeth Browning.
Keep writing
Peace
Ammar
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Re: THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
(User Rating: 1 ) by duff on
Wednesday, 28th September 2011 @ 11:58:19 AM AEST (User
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A wonderful poem written with wise intelligence that captivates from the start that finishes strong...these following lines are awesome
The words we wished to rest upon the ground
Have shown themselves as whispers in the wind;
Great lines and a fantastic poem.
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Re: THEN LIFT YOUR CARPET OFF THE FLOOR, MY FRIEND
(User Rating: 1 ) by ming on
Thursday, 29th September 2011 @ 08:26:30 PM AEST (User
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My favorite one of yours to date! The candles gathered, grabbed me and I stayed...
ming :) |
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