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The Birdsong
Contributed by
ammar
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Monday, 5th September 2011 @ 10:50:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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As she stood outside and glanced around -
Beholding the sky, gazing at the ground -
The clouds cracked and the downpour started;
She watched as the gleams of sunlight departed.
Soon the violent wind replaced the breeze
And she grew cold; her shivering increased.
The day darkened as the light decayed
And those colours drearily began to fade.
Yet, somewhere distant she now fixes her gaze
At a sight designed to bewilder and amaze:
A bird singing and soaring in the rain,
Its delightful song a contrast to her pain.
Rapt in its song, it seems unaware
Of her dismal mood, as it glides through the air.
She listens quietly as it dreamily says,
‘This bleakness, a glimmer of hope can erase.’
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ammar
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2011-09-05 10:50:17]
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Re: The Birdsong
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by emystar on
Monday, 5th September 2011 @ 11:18:56 AM AEST
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Awesome writing.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: The Birdsong
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by FlintHunter on
Monday, 5th September 2011 @ 12:41:09 PM AEST
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| This is a masterpiece of writing. The content is delightful -- how wonderful to allow for the light of hope -- for the birdsong -- amidst the terrible thunder and the stormy wind. Equally -- (good word) -- I am impressed by the EQUAL division between the two octets. It reminds me of a thing that is reflected -- symmetrically -- as, for example, a boat on a lake. The two halves relate -- in shape -- the one mirroring the other; I'm afraid I didn't say this quite as I see it -- but... regardless of my meandering, you, ammar, stuck to your guns -- as it were. The piece is seamless: it is a Poem --flinthunter |
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Re: The Birdsong
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by angelabella on
Monday, 5th September 2011 @ 03:40:55 PM AEST
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Wow. that's amazing. It's beautiful. I like how you choose the birdsong to symbolized a glimmer of hope. Truly amazing.
Keep on writing. |
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