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A YOUNG GIRL AWAITS...
Contributed by
angelabella
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Thursday, 25th August 2011 @ 04:59:58 AM in AEST
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A young girl awaits....
Even just a silhouette
But the road seem endless
The night seems too dark
Lights flicker.
Stars shine.
The moon blinks.
Lightening up the road
That boasts with pride
Whilst the girl is swallowed
with emptiness
Her heart shattered in pieces
Her soul dies...
The last teardrop on her eyes
The comfort she yearns
is but a lump in the throat
A dream from the past.
The light dies.
The stars stop to shine.
The moon hides away.
The road still is endless.
But on the young woman's face
Is a smile of contentment
That shatters "FOREVER" in a billion pieces
The wait was long.
But the wait is over.
Copyright ©
angelabella
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2011-08-25 04:59:58]
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Re: A YOUNG GIRL AWAITS...
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by emystar on
Thursday, 25th August 2011 @ 05:04:11 AM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
This write is very powerful and wise.
Big blessings,
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Re: A YOUNG GIRL AWAITS...
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by mvvenkataraman on
Saturday, 27th August 2011 @ 06:55:37 AM AEST
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Dear poetess Angelabela,
As your dad is not with you
I had for you a very sad view
On that grounds I read your poem
Which happened to be a real gem
Still the ending is not very clear
How the girl has removed tear?
What made her get confidence?
Here struggles my intelligence
Her mind, has she made up?
How has she got the pep?
The poem went on very fluently
Expression was made gently
Suddenly the end gives confusion
May be I have no skill's possession
On the whole the poem is nice
I must make myself extra wise.
With best wishes, Thanking you, Yours truly,
mvvenkataraman
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