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bright and frantic
Contributed by
ming
on
Saturday, 13th August 2011 @ 07:42:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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visual spikes
under
tucked tight
nightmares
staring at
ENDS
advoiding
mirrors
with all the
subtlety
of a tropical
storm
and
a thousand
letters
words
thoughts
clattering
like dying
crickets
nagging
interior monologue
petitions
flying
by
guilt and doubt
oh weary
forebrain.
Copyright ©
ming
... [
2011-08-13 19:42:49]
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Re: bright and frantic
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by poeticjestix on
Sunday, 14th August 2011 @ 10:00:52 AM AEST
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| real stand-up poetry there. Thanks for sharing |
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Re: bright and frantic
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by UNORTHODOX on
Sunday, 14th August 2011 @ 10:18:36 AM AEST
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You have a flow which can't be ignored
my mind like a punching bag for your array of intellect
"thoughts clattering like dying crickets" pure metaphoric genius
with out a doubt you own the artistic regions of your soul
-UNORTHODOX
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Re: bright and frantic
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by Sagefairy on
Monday, 15th August 2011 @ 03:38:15 PM AEST
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Juxtaposition between the quote and the poem is interesting. Seems written in an introspective manner which I find intriguing. Nicely done!
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Re: bright and frantic
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by duff on
Wednesday, 17th August 2011 @ 12:26:37 AM AEST
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| Another incredibly original and creative piece of work you have here...your words lure the reader in til the end...a nice piece of writing...well done |
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Re: bright and frantic
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by Aspirant on
Sunday, 21st August 2011 @ 02:16:35 AM AEST
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Mesmerizing. The first stanza scared me. The second felt like jealousy. The concepts seem to flow back into the words as new ones emerge, yet there is no trace of transition in this seamless piece of art.
There's also something insistently honest about this write, which is the best feature good writing can have as far as I'm concerned. While all your writes are full of imagery and creativity, none have held my attention in a vice like this one. Fine work. |
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