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Message from the grave
Contributed by
unorthodox
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Saturday, 6th August 2011 @ 12:05:14 PM in AEST
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Pb through my head,
as she dives for pieces of my thoughts,
broad daylight baited silence,
the world left to shock
In retrospect my words were clear,
but it seems there is still question;
either no one can see, believes,
or even cares,that I lost my mind,
in a courageous effort to expose repugnance
It seems this fate upon you,
is welcomed ,as you bask;in hatred,denial,
and ignorant pride,while shadows;
shape like masters,
still poisoning subconscience
From my grave I shift,
as the plan is nearly stone complete,
did I leave this world in vain,
or will the movement stave defeat,
it's the machine that must be shut down,
and the kings removed of crown,
for the clock is tic, tic ,ticking,
purging freedom.
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unorthodox
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Re: Message from the grave
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by CommasCanSeperate on
Saturday, 6th August 2011 @ 03:15:24 PM AEST
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| really like the way it's so randomly written and put out, fantastic write, x |
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Re: Message from the grave
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by Aspirant on
Saturday, 6th August 2011 @ 08:09:55 PM AEST
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| Your feelings are common but the content isn't clear. Whatever it is, you've captured something powerful in this verse. Well done! |
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Re: Message from the grave
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by duff on
Wednesday, 10th August 2011 @ 12:46:32 AM AEST
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Heavy and provocative leaving us to sort the rest out...profound linings that scratch at the core of what is present and how the future looks so sad...great write my friend
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Re: Message from the grave
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by ming on
Thursday, 11th August 2011 @ 09:28:26 AM AEST
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I felt you backing away from the sheeple mentality with full warning and thus causing confusion to a certain few. We poets are at times a blunt lot with subtle dark feelings. Great write...
ming |
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Re: Message from the grave
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by angelabella on
Saturday, 20th August 2011 @ 01:45:08 AM AEST
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| I don't really understand it....but there's some kind of feeling in it that really gets into...:) |
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Re: Message from the grave
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by desire on
Saturday, 11th August 2012 @ 12:41:50 AM AEST
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I must say this type of poetry you write is
Something different than I'm use to
Like a deep poetic ramblings of the mind
I simply love it. I am a fan of your work
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Loved it |
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