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A flame beneath the water
Contributed by
deusdeira
on
Wednesday, 8th June 2011 @ 01:56:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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A flame beneath the water,
such beauty... oh so rare,
an angel among demons,
can't moves beneath your stare,
Fragrance of a goddess,
the calm within the storm,
Hotter than a lightning bolt,
gods envy and they scorn,
such beauty and creation,
the world has never seen,
the universe within your eyes,
a never ending scene,
A hurricane of passion,
such beauty... so serene,
I'm lost within your loving heart,
this perfect tangled skein.
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deusdeira
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2011-06-08 13:56:56]
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Re: A flame beneath the water
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by Ramfire on
Wednesday, 8th June 2011 @ 02:27:35 PM AEST
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| Well crafted poem with lines two and four rhyming in each paragraph. Poem has passion and the words form a picture in my mind of someone you really love. |
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Re: A flame beneath the water
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by deusdeira on
Friday, 10th June 2011 @ 03:44:22 AM AEST
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| lmao... if a moderator sees this, the last word is supposed to be skein. not skin. hahaha |
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Re: A flame beneath the water
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 10th June 2011 @ 02:17:54 PM AEST
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Loved the title, for me one of the main reasons I'm drawn to read something in the first place..............but not only that, I also enjoyed reading from top to toe.
If you want the last word changed, ask the site owner.There is a forum for that here. |
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Re: A flame beneath the water
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 19th July 2011 @ 01:34:47 AM AEST
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Beautiful writing.
blessings |
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