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Numb
Contributed by
Jilli_bean
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Sunday, 27th April 2003 @ 11:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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my headaches
it aches with an unkown purpose
slowly losing control over my mind
starting to slip and slide
I try to please you i do
failing at that would be impossile
ludacris even
yet that was my only sucess
the pain begans to ease
and as i have slipped away, way out of of
anyone's reach
I wake up and the pain comes back
...
just like always
but you learn to deal
with costant torture
you become numb
(and that's not such a bad thing)
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Jilli_bean
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2003-04-27 23:35:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Numb
(User Rating: 1 ) by boobies on
Monday, 28th April 2003 @ 07:00:18 PM AEST (User
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brilliant! |
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Re: Numb
(User Rating: 1 ) by stargazer on
Monday, 28th April 2003 @ 10:06:25 PM AEST (User
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Another poem, another quote. You know the drill, Jill. HAHA... I'm the next Dr. Sesus, NOT! Okay anyway...
First things first: That was absoutley amazing, just like always. But I am going to critize this time.
At first... you seemed really down about the pain, and at the end you realize that you need to deal? Is that what happens? That was the only thing. The way it flows, makes you wonder... and forces you to read on.
You have natural talent... and an extrodinary gift....
Amy |
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