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Hollow stars
Contributed by
bigj
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Wednesday, 30th March 2011 @ 09:52:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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at night i look up
stare at the stars
how similar we are
yet they are so far
putting off this light
but most are dead
yet we see life
nothing of a soul left
i wear this smile
but its only a mask
inside is hollow
i fake every task
every laugh and smile
is forced from within
muscles and sounds just form
when did this begin
maybe when i loved
and dropped on my knees
when i took her away
and asked to marry me
maybe when i became
not good enough
i saw it in her eyes
then everything became rough
i left her
destroyed my heart
but it had to be done
a new pain began to start
over time i couldn't feel
my emotions were numb
no were to escape
no were to run
now i'm just a star
dead and bright
nothing left of me
except this light
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2011-03-30 09:52:06]
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Re: Hollow stars
(User Rating: 1 )
by cashfan1 on
Wednesday, 30th March 2011 @ 10:39:16 AM AEST
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| Well done. This is a fine piece of writing, free flowing with a nice rhyming pattern. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Hollow stars
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by emystar on
Thursday, 31st March 2011 @ 12:05:33 AM AEST
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Well ,
I luved it especially the last 2 lines.
Awesome.
Huggs, blessings,
emy |
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