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Ashes
Contributed by
Dirkj
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Sunday, 6th March 2011 @ 11:21:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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I Find comfort
In listening to the
Beautiful beat of your heart
I Find comfort
In learning lessons
In those big green eyes
But my comfort
Have turned into your tears
Tears i have kept
As souveneirs
Deep deep in my heart
NOW have escaped
As waterfalls through my eyes
Gone yesterday
Gone today
Gone tomorrow
The spark of our emotions
Have turned into ashes
Ashes the only thing left
Deep deep inside our hearts
Copyright ©
Dirkj
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2011-03-06 23:21:50]
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Re: Ashes
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by emystar on
Sunday, 6th March 2011 @ 11:37:03 PM AEST
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Great writing.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: Ashes
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by emystar on
Sunday, 6th March 2011 @ 11:37:06 PM AEST
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Great writing.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: Ashes
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by hacktastic on
Monday, 7th March 2011 @ 01:11:47 AM AEST
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Your writing started out so happily, I Find comfort
In listening to the
Beautiful beat of your heart
Then it took such a quick turn to tears. You did a good job summarizing the fragility and unpredictable directions of relationships.
I like this part:
Gone yesterday
Gone today
Gone tomorrow
I also like pizza. Nice work.
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Re: Ashes
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by Mando on
Friday, 11th March 2011 @ 08:30:42 AM AEST
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| Very well written i like this |
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