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perpetual emotion
Contributed by
poeticjestix
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Tuesday, 1st February 2011 @ 11:29:56 PM in AEST
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Love is a vacuum inside your brain
that doesn't know the difference between pleasure and pain
Pain is the price for our wants and need
always wanting more, most suffer from greed
greed grabs whatever, be it pounds or pence
grass is always greener. No gate just fence
fence is the frail defence around your heart
along comes a bulldozer to smash it apart
apart is the inevitable, and it's shadow comes near
the thought of it hangs with dread and fear
fear is the enemy that stops you dead
when you can't figure out what's in your suitors head
head is the area for mind and face
one tricks the viewer whilst the other finds space
space is the area outside not in
search for it with vigour on the way to sin
sin is the freedom that is on remand
the worst can be done with sleight of hand
hand is the register it's movement's fine
wishes regretfully can't undo time
time is the healer or so they say
procrastinating enemy. Alone I stay
stay was the plea over and above
Ignored. Denied. Exhausted love
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poeticjestix
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Re: perpetual emotion
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by cashfan1 on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2011 @ 02:27:12 AM AEST
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| Wow!! This is packed with intensity. I love the rhyme and the smooth flow of this. Deep but very easy on the mind. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: perpetual emotion
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by Bolts on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2011 @ 12:43:39 PM AEST
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| Awesome poem! Really dark and cynical. Got the feeling the sentiment is the opposite of what it conventionally should be i.e 'love' as defined in this poem would commonly described as 'hate', 'pain' as 'pleasure' etc. etc. (maybe just me) Really nice rhyme, and an intelligent piece. Keep up the good work!! |
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Re: perpetual emotion
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by PreciousKitten on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2011 @ 04:04:24 PM AEST
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| It spoke to me in a way that says i understand your point of view. I truly understand what you are saying here in this poem. Keep writing. I like it. |
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Re: perpetual emotion
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by huwbeauty on
Thursday, 3rd February 2011 @ 02:39:37 AM AEST
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| Really well written poem this,with some dark pessimism yet a lot of truth to it. |
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Re: perpetual emotion
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by Ruby2sdy on
Thursday, 3rd February 2011 @ 08:00:01 AM AEST
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I really like the style of this, excellently written, highly readable!
2sdy |
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