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Awakening.
Contributed by
cashfan1
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Monday, 31st January 2011 @ 05:55:04 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Darkness has entered the pin point
Opening of my mind,
Demon dark and deep
It swirls like an autumn mist,
Crashes like a wave
On the shoreline of my sleep.
And there, high on an ancient cliff,
A solitary star is entering the night sky.
A shadow, stiff with frost and fright,
Comes upon me
And I turn and face its fear,
A fear mirrored in the eyes of my mind,
Delicately embroidered
On the fabric of my sanity.
With a heavy heart and shaking legs
I flee across fields infiltrated by ghosts
And memories of the past,
I crash through woods,
Dense and dozy with sleep
Until with a hot flush of certainty
My legs buckle, my heart beats a military drum,
And I fall gratefully
Into the warm embrace of my awakening.
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Re: Awakening.
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by huwbeauty on
Monday, 31st January 2011 @ 07:21:24 AM AEST
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Wow very dark,makes the anxious dream I had last night, pale into insignificance.This is a different side I'm seeing to you, yet still brilliantly written, your descriptive power is awesome.
These lines I especially liked;
'And I turn and face it's fear,
A fear mirrored in the eyes of my mind,
Delicately embroidered
On the fabric of my sanity.'
Mat.
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Re: Awakening.
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by poeticjestix on
Monday, 31st January 2011 @ 10:47:50 AM AEST
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| i like this a lot. Looks like you woke up at the right time! |
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Re: Awakening.
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by Savannah1085 on
Monday, 31st January 2011 @ 02:20:37 PM AEST
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wow, i have dreams like this all the time!! its like you wrote this poem...just for me...wow....
Savvy |
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Re: Awakening.
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by RyanS on
Monday, 31st January 2011 @ 03:34:23 PM AEST
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| I like the descriptions. I wish I could remember my dreams as vividly as you |
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Re: Awakening.
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st February 2011 @ 07:17:07 PM AEST
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| A great poem, with excellent description. Your dreams is captured well. |
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Re: Awakening.
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by Jenn2004 on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2011 @ 01:57:26 PM AEST
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I read your poem and I like to interpret dreams.
Darkeness- Fear of the unknown.
Demons- letting lust give way to your better judgement.
Cliff- Indicates that you have reached a new level of understanding, new awareness, and a fresh point of view. Also suggests that you are pondering a life altering decision.
Shadow- to see your own shadow, signifies an aspect of yourself which you have not acknowledged or recognized. To see a shadowy figure represents characteristics which you have not acknowleged or incorporated into your own personality.
Ghosts- symbolizes aspects of yourself that you fear.
Field- You may be going through a field of personal growth.
Memories-You are ready for a new outlook in life.
Woods-Unknown and unconscious
Heartbeat- To hear a heartbeat in your dream, suggests that you are not confronting or recognizing your feelings.
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Re: Awakening.
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by Ambivalence on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2011 @ 05:12:12 PM AEST
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pretty amazing stuff here...u expressed your deep night dream very well, it's as if I was there. great write. I must say, a side note, there must be something lurking in your subconscious mind.
take care
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Re: Awakening.
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd February 2011 @ 01:30:59 AM AEST
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Into the warm embrace of my awakening
I love the way you sum it up!!!! Excellent poem. I think you captured what many of us feel when we dream those dream maybe more accurately described as a nightmare.
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