|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
immortal whore
Contributed by
wallerdude
on
Wednesday, 26th January 2011 @ 12:49:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
invited death to my doorstep and excluded my pride,
left the whore in my, bed followed the pimp outside...
he took what was left of my sanity
and i cursed my life with this profanity...
i only knew of peace when i caused pain,
now im starting to feel there pain flowing through my veins...
but it was different with her we were bound by hate,
her mortal kiss made me immortal, i paid the piper of fate...
I lacked the courage of my convictions,
the will to abandon my addictions...
im only flesh and blood stripped down the minimum bare,
living on the thought that there is no hell or that they just dont want me there...
If death had a heart he would be me,
with evil as my point of view for no creature is under God as we!!!
I said farewell to the whore and became what iv become,
will you take care of her, my raven angel while im gone...
now i listen to the souls no words can describe it,
may aswel ask heaven what it sees, no one knows but the birds...
I'm a spirit of preternatural flesh. Unhinged and empty you asked
for a story of my life, my life was a tomb a graveyard of lost souls all
resembling her face.
Copyright ©
wallerdude
... [
2011-01-26 12:49:26]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: immortal whore
(User Rating: 1 )
by Debris on
Wednesday, 26th January 2011 @ 01:22:57 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Well done on writing your first poem!
The theme isn't one I'd personally go for, but there are some really nice lines in this piece; particularly the last line "my life was a tomb a graveyard of lost souls all
resembling her face".
Keep up the good work and keep writing/
|
|
|
Re: immortal whore
(User Rating: 1 )
by deusdeira on
Wednesday, 26th January 2011 @ 06:29:46 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| heartfelt I think, and I enjoyed the rawness of it. good job. |
|
|
Re: immortal whore
(User Rating: 1 )
by kleetas on
Thursday, 27th January 2011 @ 06:10:10 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Are you hung up on the word or the fixation you have without even using your tomb of illusion line..either way its a dark scarry spiralling ball of energy when righted is like a superbird of raw white light spiralling through the planets and points beyond her illusions' reach...a whore no more!...but a victim's lore....that whore that once was you...I GIVE YOU A 'FIVE! |
|
|
Re: immortal whore
(User Rating: 1 )
by irisblue on
Thursday, 27th January 2011 @ 06:14:50 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Tragic and beautiful. amazing first poem. |
|
|
Re: immortal whore
(User Rating: 1 )
by Daniellemarie on
Friday, 28th January 2011 @ 11:02:27 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
well well well I really like your style well done we all need to be a bit evil to survive.
-DanielleMarie- |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
