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Delays
Contributed by
duff
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Monday, 24th January 2011 @ 08:45:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Reason escapes sobriety leaving me alone
Eyes wide open examining chalky finger tips
Morality struggles to hide the sadness while
This opiate mirage dusts my haven once more
Reservations to see her smile are forgotten
Like ties swinging from the closet gallows
I can’t recall temptation not wearing its crown
Opportunities die in the stale water calm
As my soul waltzes into shame unable to turn
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duff
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2011-01-24 20:45:20]
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Re: Delays
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by sicknivesevered on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 02:07:54 AM AEST
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| It took me a moment to understand, but this is really good. I especially like the beginning picture, from the mind to hands. |
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Re: Delays
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by cashfan1 on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 03:37:27 AM AEST
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Hi Duff
This is an awesome write. So deep but so easy to read, i love this poem, possibly the best I've read on this site. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Delays
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 05:04:05 AM AEST
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| I can't recall tempatation not wearing its crown...... the pivotal line and the main statement for any addiction, and therein lies the endless struggle and sadness and the continual delay to life beginning,as always so much respect for a very talented writer. |
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Re: Delays
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by huwbeauty on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 07:07:45 AM AEST
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Wow great write again Duff,I know this feeling all to well once you've been there temptation's always round the corner('I can’t recall temptation not wearing its crown' brilliant line) and then there's the shame that comes with it.
Really enjoy reading your work it's always a challenge,I mean that in a good way,because you can pack so much depth into just one short line and it always makes me think.
Mat. |
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Re: Delays
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by ming on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 08:17:52 AM AEST
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You KNOW you have a winner when most agree that this line rocks it!
'I can’t recall temptation not wearing its crown'
ming
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Re: Delays
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by UNORTHODOX on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 12:20:19 PM AEST
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Such a mature and accomplished write
it's not the flawlessness which strikes me
so much as the beauty of your composition
in these lines are wisdom beyond your years
truly compelling, and nothing short of awesome
-UNORTHODOX |
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Re: Delays
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by deusdeira on
Wednesday, 9th February 2011 @ 02:19:18 AM AEST
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In addiction temptation really is the ruler of us, and does indeed wear a crown.
I really enjoyed the lines "Reservations to see her smile are forgotten
Like ties swinging from the closet gallows"
Your writing always makes me think. Such a sad poem. |
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