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sandcastle king
Contributed by
poeticjestix
on
Saturday, 22nd January 2011 @ 03:35:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I never could play football
and I know I cannot sing.
Poker doesn't suit me,
I'm the sandcastle king.
In my youth I thought I had it
but I never had a thing.
Arrogantly useless,
I'm the sandcastle king
Thought I should get better,
chip on shoulder, broken wing.
Never tried to make it.
I'm the sandcastle king.
Waited by the phone
but it was never gonna ring.
Life's not on a platter
I'm the sandcastle king
Time I thought was with me
but shock hit. The bell went “ding!”
Shadows slowly growing
I'm the sandcastle king.
Now I stand there proudly
as the tide is coming in.
Surely it won't reach me
I'm the sandcastle king!
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poeticjestix
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2011-01-22 15:35:41] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: sandcastle king
(User Rating: 1 ) by Voyager on
Sunday, 23rd January 2011 @ 12:15:33 AM AEST (User
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Its a very interesting write because in the beginning it had a very casual tone and so was slightly humourous and then in the middle it was kind of a transition so it was ambiguous as to which direction it was gona take. Then it took a sad, darker tone, kind of accepting the fate sort of thing. Nice contours. |
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