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Crickets
Contributed by
brianimal
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Thursday, 20th January 2011 @ 03:29:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Dreaming a Memory
Your eyes a blur, mind is foggy
Your conscience alive, but lost somewhere between...
is it reality or dream?
Your last thoughts move like the bubbles of a boiling pot off the stove...
like a field of black starlings, scattering at the slamming door.
Boom! All at once they begin to fade.
You smell the sweetness of the fresh cut grass.
You hear the ocean of leaves with every breeze,
the clumsy racoons as they stumble over the damp forest floor...
silencing the crickets and their magnificent stringed symphony.
That elegant breeze dancing past sheer curtains caressing your cheek.
You see the silouette of your beautiful lover as the moon illuminates her calm heaving chest,
You hear her faint breath,
You feel her warmth by your side....in your heart.
In that moment, you are at peace.
But, you are dreaming.
You are dreaming a memory in every perfect detail.
An echo of another life not so long ago.
Imagined or not....
and the crickets played on.
Copyright ©
brianimal
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2011-01-20 03:29:29]
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Re: Crickets
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by huwbeauty on
Thursday, 20th January 2011 @ 07:28:00 AM AEST
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| Good write,great imagery,these kind of dreams are wonderful until you wake up. |
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Re: Crickets
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by DrcGaimer on
Thursday, 20th January 2011 @ 08:09:51 AM AEST
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| Simply beautiful. I loved the line "you hear the ocean of leaves with every breeze." Good write. |
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Re: Crickets
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by euphoema on
Thursday, 20th January 2011 @ 08:20:39 AM AEST
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YOU ARE A VERY DETAILED WRITER. YOU PAINT THE PICTURE VERY WELL WITH YOUR WORDS. AS I READ YOUR WORK I SEE IMAGES, WHICH GOOD POETRY IS SUPPOSED TO DO.
I AM NEW TO THIS SITE AND I AM UNSURE HOW TO ADD FRIENDS. CAN YOU PLEASE ADD ME AND EXPLAIN HOW I CAN ADD OTHERS. THANK YOU! |
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Re: Crickets
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by ming on
Monday, 24th January 2011 @ 12:05:44 PM AEST
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I LOVE this line;
'like a field of black starlings, scattering at the slamming door'
I wish it was mine. :)
ming |
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