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Burn Eternal
Contributed by
zred7619
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Monday, 17th January 2011 @ 07:21:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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A painful discovery,
In a dream, I can't wake;
That kindness and wit
Do not bonds create.
Surrounded but empty,
Connected yet frayed;
The secret elusive,
To halt heart's dismay.
So strong yet so fragile,
Hopeful, though shaken;
In search for the answer
To finally awaken.
Turned dark by one's fear,
Doubts arise, faith evades;
Dream transformed to nightmare,
Gleam of light softly fades.
Dejection, regret,
These thoughts can encumber
One, seemingly trapped
In this unending slumber.
Convinced that true happiness
Exists but for few.
Restless in waiting
to be proven untrue.
But for now, dream in peace,
For one truth does inspire;
While hope's flame remains burning,
So too, heart's desire.
Copyright ©
zred7619
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2011-01-17 19:21:14]
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Re: Burn Eternal
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by emystar on
Monday, 17th January 2011 @ 07:54:57 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
this awesome writing.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: Burn Eternal
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by deusdeira on
Monday, 17th January 2011 @ 11:39:13 PM AEST
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| That was deep and very thoughtful, and expressive as you stated. I absolutely loved it. Please keep writing poems. An unending slumber... a great analogy. I am also better with the written word, than the spoken word. Sometimes I wish we all just wrote out thoughts instead of speaking them haha. |
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Re: Burn Eternal
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by huwbeauty on
Tuesday, 18th January 2011 @ 12:54:36 AM AEST
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| A great emotional write,that flows wonderfully and doesn't seem over worked.Full of anguish yet finishing with optimism |
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Re: Burn Eternal
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by InfinitePoet on
Thursday, 3rd February 2011 @ 11:53:45 PM AEST
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Great flowing, & mystical words!! It imedeatly
reached out for my mind!! I had 2 read it over again!!! Good JOb!! Keep it up!!!! |
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