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Imperfect Pine
Contributed by
xHeathenx
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Sunday, 9th January 2011 @ 02:11:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Rigid Wooden Spine
Standing Straight and Still
Shaggy Coniferous Foliage
Lacking Completion
Lacking itself
Seemingly Lifeless
Yet Somehow Still Alive
A Dull, Yet Droll Inanimate Husk
With No Thoughts of Its Own.
Oh Imperfect Pine
You and I are not indifferent
Why is it so imperfect Pine,
That Your means no more than mine?
Why is it so as well Imperfect Pine,
That you choose to stay alive?
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Re: Imperfect Pine
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by Voyager on
Sunday, 9th January 2011 @ 03:06:14 AM AEST
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| A Very abstract philosophic reflection....hard to come by these days....a lot of depth in your thoughts... |
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Re: Imperfect Pine
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by xHeathenx on
Sunday, 9th January 2011 @ 03:10:06 AM AEST
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I know I'm not supposed to comment on my own poems, but I just wanted to point out to anyone reading that in the last few lines,
The line should say
"Oh Imperfect Pine
You and I are not so indifferent
Why is it so Imperfect Pine,
That Your **life** means no more than mine?"
The word life was missing out of it. I somehow forgot to type that word. |
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Re: Imperfect Pine
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by Ambivalence on
Sunday, 9th January 2011 @ 08:13:10 PM AEST
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i can relate to your poem's theme...but if i were to answer the last line as the Imperfect Pine, i would lie to you (and myself) although i already know the answer...sadly.
take care
-K.Z. |
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