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I Miss You.. Metal.
Contributed by
CommasCanSeperate
on
Monday, 3rd January 2011 @ 03:43:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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I miss you and the way you used to hug into my arm
I miss the way we used to be and how you could always comfort me
I miss how as you sank into me I felt undeniably happy
I miss how at night we could talk and compromise over all my tears and lies
I miss how you somehow managed to kiss everything better with your edges
I miss how they were so fine, so defined.
I miss how, I knew where I stood with them and how I could control and know them
I miss how they drew, and when they began to draw everything became clearer
I miss how, as they did so I could see myself bursting with pride
I miss how the pride used to run away and run down upon to my moist palms
I miss how they used to connect and dance with each other
I miss how the little swirls of cells would run through my fingers and hit the floor
I miss how as they dropped they would make a small short sound, like a pin drop
I miss how they used to splash out a little and sometimes dash onto things I wish they wouldn’t
I miss how sensitive and calm I felt after they had done their business
I miss how as I ran my finger along my arm I could feel a little emotion
I miss you mostly though
I miss you, and the damage you used to do.
I miss you, and the way you reminded me and how I felt relief around you.
I miss you, and the way you used to possess me.
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Re: I Miss You.. Metal.
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by Jussy74 on
Tuesday, 4th January 2011 @ 03:37:43 PM AEST
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| This piece took my breath away, such brave words and such an insight into how you feel, I commend you for your writing and truly hope that this form of release gives you at least some form of peace. x |
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Re: I Miss You.. Metal.
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by xHeathenx on
Monday, 24th January 2011 @ 05:42:19 AM AEST
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While I personally may not be able to relate with the topic of the poem, I had a girlfriend once who did this, and I remember being disappointed in seeing that she would hurt herself. I remember giving her my favorite hoodie, even though I was just a little too big for it, and she cut herself, and I remember seeing her sitting alone sad, eyeliner running in her room, and I asked her, and she nodded. Then I saw that the hoodie I had given her, she was wearing, and I could see bloodstains in the sleeve. I remember so many times where I wished she could stop herself, and just talk but she had fears that I couldn't understand. So ever since then, this topic makes me uncomfortable. However I do appreciate your linear progression of what you're talking about, in how by just talking about what you miss, it's telling a story in itself.
I'm sure it's a very well written poem, but it touches me in the wrong way, so I'm sure it's not likely I can take the more positive intentions out of it. |
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