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It's all over.
Contributed by
huwbeauty
on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 04:51:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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It's all over,
I sleep on the sofa,
My life goes by slower,
You don't even know her,
Will it end,
On you I depend,
The further I descend,
I know it's the end.
It's all over,
Everything I strove for,
Wish I were bolder,
Wish I could hold her,
'tis the end,
I cannot depend,
I cannot pretend,
This is not the end.
It's all over,
I lie in the clover,
Smile at my revolver,
The problem solver,
It will end,
On that I depend,
I will not rescind,
'cause this is my end.
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Re: It's all over.
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by Aworldofemotions on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 06:15:16 PM AEST
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| UM WOW I LIKE IT. IT'S FILLED WITH EMOTION; BUT IT COULD BE ORGANIZE BETTER. |
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Re: It's all over.
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by Voyager on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 07:12:18 PM AEST
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| good poem with a sad ending. But i can relate to some of those emotions. The fight for life is nothing less than challenging and giving up crosses one's mind often. You've captured that well. |
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Re: It's all over.
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by unknown_utopia on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 07:44:52 PM AEST
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I've been there so I know your pain and emotional torture.....Good release of a silent scream.
Well done. |
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Re: It's all over.
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by cashfan1 on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 11:00:26 PM AEST
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| This is indeed sad but you handle the sadness brilliantly. Well thought out, well organised words that tell of pure emotions. Another well written piece. |
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Re: It's all over.
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by deusdeira on
Saturday, 25th December 2010 @ 11:26:18 AM AEST
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| I love the whole thing. It captures the feeling of helplessness a person feels after/during the breakup. Sad but beautiful. |
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Re: It's all over.
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by brialuv on
Tuesday, 18th January 2011 @ 08:37:16 AM AEST
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| a breakup is nerver easy to take in i love how you've expressed it in words..good job ! |
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