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Down South
Contributed by
iodinelove
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Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 02:11:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Swiftly now and down
South a ways
Where the moss grows
Thicker than mud
And molasses,
And the mosquitoes
Mark their targets
Fine
Where peaches chat idly
On church pews and porches
About
How dreams about leaving
Would suit them just
Fine
Down far enough
To see the old city heat
Still berating the new
And the white wash
Still souring at mid-afternoon
The hands of a few reckless boys
Caught cussing and fighting
Down where the town drunks
Down a bottle or two
With mouths full of chew
And a broken mans dreams
Go swiftly now and stay
Down to Georgia
Alabama
Louisiana way
Down yonder to the holler
Or mud hole or hill
Where
Heavens feverish
Shrill still brings
Hope to the world
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iodinelove
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2010-12-24 02:11:58]
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Re: Down South
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by Aworldofemotions on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 06:05:57 PM AEST
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| I LIKE THE WAY YOU PAINTED A PICTURE OF THE ENVIRONMENT. |
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Re: Down South
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by cashfan1 on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 11:17:08 PM AEST
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| Nice one. Although I've never been anywhere in your country this certainly had me believing I was down south. A very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Down South
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by ming on
Tuesday, 28th December 2010 @ 12:00:47 PM AEST
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This line jumped for me;
'Where the moss grows
Thicker than mud'
ming |
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Re: Down South
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 29th December 2010 @ 06:53:40 PM AEST
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I intend to, hopefully in the coming year (although the mozzies aren't a good selling point). But those peaches on porches - Whoohoo!
just gets better on the re-reads. My poem of the day.
Spike |
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