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Just before I leave
Contributed by
zeberdee
on
Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 05:28:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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I'm nearing the future with fast pace
passing the burning buildings of my past
and all the problems I couldn't face
I fought them my own way by trying to outlast
but its all petty concerns now that the train is arriving
I have a lost thought before I leave
what if the future is more gloom and I should have stood fast?
no time for that I know I my future will be thriving
In 5 minutes im gone forever.. its hard to believe..
this place where I have so many bad memories
the breaking of my esteem the corruption of my mind all things I cant appease
I take a last breath of corrupt air..
while I promise myself I wont fall to despair..
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zeberdee
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2010-12-10 17:28:26]
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Re: Just before I leave
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by Anbarean on
Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 09:29:44 PM AEST
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""I take a last breath of corrupt air..
while I promise myself I wont fall to despair..""
I like this line you wrote, I like your writting, and keep up the good work.
Takecare
Anbarean |
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Re: Just before I leave
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by MiaPeterson on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 04:59:55 AM AEST
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| This is such a deep poem I almost burst into tears. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to it. Good job&Keep writing! |
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Re: Just before I leave
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by DrcGaimer on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 09:25:34 AM AEST
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| Fight or flight, our natural response to adversity. Yet, not everything is worth fighting for. But leaving presents new challenges, as well as new uncertainties. Your conveyance of this was perfect. |
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